Tuesday, February 4, 2014

Short Story

Cages



It was game day and she was ready to go. All she could think about at school was this game. Her last High School Championship as a senior in her school now. She wanted the win more than anything she had ever wanted before, especially against their rival team the Rams. The crowd would be roaring for sure tonight, and she knew she had to be on her game in order to win. She was their secret weapon, a major necessity to keep the team focused and intense. This was it. And she was ready to go.


Alex came down the stairs to find her breakfast sitting on the table for her.


“What is this all about?” she said to her dad


“Well, it’s a big day for you and i just wanted to make sure that you would be performing at your best ability tonight, so i made you a nice and nutritious breakfast.”


“Thanks dad your the best coach out there” she said back, ate her breakfast and left the house to her car and drove off to school.
Sinced today was a big game day, the school decided to have a pep rally to get everybody pumped. The schools 6th man was one of the best, but one of the most inconsiderate crowds out there. They did not care what time of the game it was, they would cheer and boo. She walked into the school and it was like a mad house. Students were running around the school cheering and yelling. Someone had even decided to print out posters of the players and hang them around the school. It was definitely a good start off to the day.


Finally it was almost game time. T minus 1 hour. Her hands were sweating and she was pacing around. The plays were racing in her head, and she could feel the sticky air of the of the gym around around her. She had only imagined this moment in her head all of her life, and now it was finally a reality. Although, something didn’t feel right to her. it was like there was a little voice in the back of her head saying that something was wrong. It’s like she could sense that something was going to happen. She put the thought aside though thinking that her nerves were just getting the best of her, and started to walk back to the locker room. She turned around sensing something behind her, but nothing was there apart from a shadow that quickly disappeared. Thinking nothing of it she walked to the locker room with the rest of her team.


“TIGERS! TIGERS! TIGERS! TIGERS!”


It was the last quarter and the score was tied, 55-55. Alex had just been knocked over and would take one foul shot that could win the game for them. ‘boom, boom, boom’ All she could hear was the ball bouncing on the wood. She got set and was right about to throw it into the hoop when all of the lights went out. The whole schools power had went out. people were screaming, it was chaos.


“HELP! SOMEBODY HELP ME! HEEEELP!” screamed Alex, but nobody seemed to hear.
Someone was grabbing her and she could not get free.


“Scream or move again and i’ll kill you right here, right now. understand?


“Y-y-yes” she stammered back to the creepily man sounding voice.


She was terrified and had no clue what to do. Punch him? Bite him? “think Alex, think” she kept telling herself, but before she even had time to react, she felt a slight pinch in her arm and her world got even darker than it was and she drifted off into a blissful sleep.
  
She finally woke up to the faint sound of a baby crying. Becoming more aware of her surroundings, she discovered it was more than one baby that was crying. In fact it was hundreds. She looked around and was stunned at what she saw. All of the babies she saw were in cages, and so was she. She figured out that she was located in some sort of barn, and its walls were filled with all different kinds of chainsaws.


“What in the world?” she thought aloud not realizing it.


“Ahhh, and the princess finally awakens from her slumber” said a creepy, low and raspy mans voice.
“Who are you and what do you want from me?” she yelled back.


Out of the shadows of the barn came a middle aged lanky man, with scruff all over his face. His eyes were as black as the night sky and cut through you like icicles. He wore torn up jeans, and a ragged shirt as if he had just walked out of a dumpster.


“You, my darling, is all that I want” He said with a smug grin on his face.


Back at home her father was frantic. He had just been trying to process all that was going on-The power went out- Alex had been taken- and he had to find her. Not only being the coach, but also a retired detective, his first instinct was to go back to the scene when the crime had taken place.


Once he had reached to school he climbed out of his car and looked around. Tire marks lay on the ground. They must be from when he was leaving with her. He thought to himself. Quick but sloppy leaving behind evidence only a beginner criminal would do. With this thought in his head he quickly headed into the gym. His eyes swept the room finding nothing. As he was about to leave he took a last glance around the room only to have something catch his eye. A wallet. He opened it up and found a licence with the name Dimitri Anglov. He felt a tingle in his stomach, one he had always gotten whenever he was certain about something- And he was certain this was the man that had taken Alex.
He was speeding down the highway only to sharply turn down a dirt road into the middle of nowhere. He had taken the licence to the station and had been able to track down Dimitri. He had hopes that he would be keeping Alex in the place he was headed. He rounded the corner only to find a small house with quite a large barn beside it. He ran inside to only be astonished by what he saw.


“DAD!” Yelled Alex from the middle of the barn.
A wave of relief washed over her fathers face as he peered into Alex’s deep blue terrified eyes. He looked around the barn trying to find the key that would unlock her cage.


“Looking for this I suppose?” Said Dimitri holding up a key in his hand.


“Let her go! Give me that key!” Her dad screamed at the man.


And all of a sudden, his body moved before his brain could figure out what he was doing and grabbed one of the various chainsaws from the wall. He pulled the cord, the machine roaring to life. He charged full force at the man. Dimitri, astonished, was frozen and didn't know how to react to his sudden movement. And with all of her fathers will power, he slashed the frozen man’s body creating a gaping bloody wound in the center of his stomach.


The man looked down at what had been done to his body and let out a soft weep before crumpling to the ground. His body lay still and motionless- he had killed Dimitri. He grabbed the key from his cold dead hand, and ran over to Alex and unlocked the cage she had been trapped in.

The police had showed up right after the action and released and took in all of the babies he had captured. Alex and her father had returned safely home. It took a while for her to realize that it even happened, but she had to accept it to get over it. And as the days passed she slowly moved on with her life making new memories, but never forgot this one. Even today it is still a mystery why he had captured Alex and the babies. The question still burns deep in the back of Alex’s mind some days. But soon the topic of the tragedy faded away, and was replaced by new ones each day.    

2 comments:

  1. 1. The conflict of the story is that the main character Alex is kidnapped by a psycho who likes to put babies in cages.
    2. The main character is Alex and as the story ends she starts to accept that she was kidnapped.
    3. My favorite part was when the dad was searching for Alex by using his detective skills.
    4. I think the story's best part is the beginning because the author really showed us how excited and ready Alex was for the basketball game and how that excitement changed into sorrow when she got kidnapped.
    5. Don't kidnap anybody or there will be consequences.
    6. The author should add more dialog with Alex and the kidnapper.

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  2. 1. The conflict of the story was when Alex got kidnapped from her basketball game. It was external. I was invested in the conflict because it made me want to continue reading and find out what would happen to Alex next.
    2. Alex changes throughout the course of the story because at the end she finally accepts that she was kidnapped and will have to live with that forever.
    3. My favorite part was when the lights went out because it was really dramatic. "Ahhh, and the princess finally awakens from her slumber." I liked this quote from the story because I thought it was creepy and it helped the reader see what the man was like.
    4. I think the best part was the conflict and the rising action/beginning because Alex was so pumped, along with the whole school for the game but then something when wrong, Alex was kidnapped.
    5. The theme was even if bad things happen you have to overcome them and let the memory fade away.
    6. I think she needs to explain more why he kidnapped Alex a senior in high school when he had all these babies.

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